dusk

it's time ~
two birds fly across the
orange sky

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father's day

father's day
the girl screams for her mama
from her papa's arms

(a scene over lunch at a restaurant on June 21)

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June 12

homeless, his eyes are
hopeless, he begs for money
independence day
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independence day
street children play basketball
on a makeshift court

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friday

chatter crescendoes
at quarter to seven
friday night

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kittens

morning sun
two white kittens wobbly
under a junk car

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Hammock

muggy night
a homeless guy sets
up a hammock

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Hai(na)ku

I reviewed my haiku pointers last night and realized I've been doing my poems wrong. I started dabbling with this beautiful Japanese poetry just last week, and I know I have a long way to go till I get it down pat. Nowhere in any site does it say that it is going to be easy, anyway. Writing extraordinarily out of the ordinary, in three lines of 17 syllables or less, is definitely not a breeze - not for me, that is.

In particular, I realized that I was writing in three fragments. Haiku (and senryu) is generally written in two parts: a fragment on the first or last line, and a phrase/sentence split on the other two lines. As a guide, a good structure for a beginner like me is:

So I did some tweaking on my poems, and I do hope it is better this time, at least technically. Here is an example:

Before

hint of dawn
half awake, half asleep
jeepneys chug and sputter

After

crack of dawn
jeepneys chug and sputter
incessantly

Okay, so "special" may not yet be written all over this haiku, but you know what they say! Practice makes perfect! :)

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